such poetic visual description...outstanding.

all cheering and waving
black handkerchiefs

+i agree completely. i think my favorite part, though, is the one about the thirty one glasses of cold water to be drunk before him. this person is astounding, i must say. +

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_{+"come now, my child, if we were planning to harm you, do you think we'd be lurking here beside the path in the very darkest part of the forest?"+
k.p.}

+thank you both.+

I don't know why but it reminds me of a ghost ship... I just woke up so it very well could be the point of the story

I love it though.. I think my favorite part is the second paragraph... it gives you a bit of a deeper look into things..... great writing

I printed it to take my time when reading. I tried hard to control myself, I must confess. For so long I've searched for an outstanding poetry gallery...

First, I enjoyed mostly the spanish version. No particular reason for, but my own nationality. I totally understand the atmosphere of the poem by the original version of it. Besides, the original title sounds better (as always).
Then,
veintitantas nadas
tres posibles quizás
un no definitivo
un imposible absoluto
My first reaction towards this part was questioning the choosen numbers. I came to this conclusion: rather than one "no definitivo" and one "imposible absoluto" is those "tres posibles quizás". Down came two possible interpretations: even being hyphothetically weaker, the "quizás" are numerically stronger or despite the higher number, the "quizás" can not be any stronger than the "no definitivo" or than the "imposible absoluto".
y el barco ebrio vomitará su carga
y me hallaré de regreso
de cara a la barra
treintaiún vasos rebosantes de agua fría
alineados frente a mí).
My very favourite part. The image of the "barco ebrio" is a pure pearl. The factual redundancy of water, enhanced by the words "barco", "regreso", "barra", "vasos rebosantes" and "agua fría" show the richness of your writing (you have the honourable capacity of evocating intricate situations using adjectives, nouns and verbs) and the metaphorical (and dichotomic) hemisphere - sea water versus drinkable water. This clear paradox, in my modest opinion, stands for the returning.

Well, I adore it.
And I am finished for today. (How clever from me, right?)

+thank you.+

+thank you. for one, this was written in both languages simultaneously. whenever i got stuck in a phrase, i'd switch and look at it in a new way, find the right words and then translate and go on. the although i couldn't say this was inspired by any particular person, it does interpret a situation, or a whole set of situations. the "possibly maybe" is a direct quote from björk, quote that was significant in one particular situation. semantically, the impossibles and definitives weigh more than the ambiguity of the possibilities, enhanced by the maybe's... those were hopeless posibilities, barely holding there before falling into the latter category. the drunken ship is again a quote, this time from Rimbaud. sea vs. drinkable water? he's there to drink them, as if facing a chore, the number meaningful, enough to drown in. thanks again. this makes it all worthwhile.+

Lol. On another art community I used to frequent, I'd sometimes criticize myself under a different name, sometimes being blatently rude, sometimes pointing out things I didn't like in a piece. It was really funny, the reactions I'd get.

Anayways, my favourite lines are:
and tight-lipped me,
tightly held to the railing
on an old ocean-liner
headed for disaster.
I think it's because you put more immagery in these lines, it allows for a more real visualization.

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Everything was beautiful and nothing hurt.

+true. i like having this guy around to do my dirty work. and thanks.+

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_{+"come now, my child, if we were planning to harm you, do you think we'd be lurking here beside the path in the very darkest part of the forest?"+
k.p.}