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this gallery
is burning on all four corners
this gallery is no longer mine.
now we are all the homeless of the soul
the covered by dust, the dry leaves, the broken books.
we are those who remained
sitting in silence, looking at our muted mouths.
all the doors open
all the windows, all the hands
dust settles upon every letter.
we are already the unreadable
the pages stuck to our bodies
we paled under the sun and became erased of words.
this gallery
burns as if made of paper,
like a defeated fortress,
like the house of our enemies.
we who were the alleged chosen ones
for praising the voyage and the nothing
now sit silently
untying one by one
the books’ signatures.
the street is an old-yellow dovecote,
one of fragile sepia birds.

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esta galería
arde por sus cuatro costados
esta galería ya no es mía.
ahora somos todos los sin casa del alma
los cubiertos de polvo, los hojas secas, los libros rotos.
somos los que quedaron
sentados en silencio, mirándonos las bocas mudas.
abiertas todas las puertas
todas las ventanas, todas las manos
el polvo se deposita sobre todas las letras.
somos ya los ilegibles
se nos pegaron las páginas al cuerpo
palidecimos al sol y nos borramos de palabras.
esta galería
arde como si de papel fuera,
como fortaleza vencida,
como la casa de nuestros enemigos.
nosotros que éramos los supuestos elegidos
para alabar el viaje y la nada
ahora nos sentamos en silencio
desatando una a una
las cuartillas de los libros.
la calle es un palomar amarillo de viejo,
un palomar de aves sepias y quebradizas.+
©2005-2009 ~astigmatic
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:icondreamspeak:
It flows like a serene river.
It sounds like revolted waters.
Amazing the way you write.
Absolutely amazing!
Nice to login for a good reading, my friend.
:+fav:

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[paula-rosa.com]
:iconastigmatic:
+thank you very much, Paula.
it means a lot :)+

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"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"
:iconimhidinginthebushes:
OO wow thats relle great! OoOoOo Im just a random person if u were wondering!

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Lying Is The Most Fun A Girl Can Have Without Taking Her Clothes Off-Panic! at the disco
I've got more wit, a better kiss, a hotter touch, a better fuck
Than any boy you'll ever meet, sweetie you had me
Girl I was it look past the sweat
:iconiamshe:
Beautiful

Of particular note to me is "untying one by one/the books' signatures." Just lovely.

I like the last line better without the repeitition of "dovecote," which is to say I think that "the street is an old-yellow dovecote/of fragile sepia birds" has more of the flow amd meter of the rest of the piece. It also leaves the reader completely unprepared for that H-bomb of a finish. Really lovely stuff.

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I think global warming is...

How deviant are you?
:iconastigmatic:
+oh, i was wondering about you...
:P+

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"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"
:iconimhidinginthebushes:
lmao :lmao: what were u wondering....

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Lying Is The Most Fun A Girl Can Have Without Taking Her Clothes Off-Panic! at the disco
I've got more wit, a better kiss, a hotter touch, a better fuck
Than any boy you'll ever meet, sweetie you had me
Girl I was it look past the sweat
:iconhamrick:
"untiying one by one"

I think it's untying. I could be wrong.
Nice flow. Surprised I haven't seen this place before.

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:iconastigmatic:
+i think you're right, again.
and so am i.+

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"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"
:iconastigmatic:
+i think you're right, again.
and so am i.+

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"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"

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