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+terminal song

i wonder if it has been worth it
this marking my body to remember you by
this marking of yours in my memory
always hanging by a thread or a wire.
standing all this rain
which haven’t stopped pouring since then
and climbing up and down so many buses
with wet clothes to the body and the hangover
and see you climbing up and down so many buses
knowing each time to be the last.

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canción terminal

me pregunto si habrá valido la pena
esto de marcar mi cuerpo en conmemoración tuya
esto de marcar el tuyo en mi memoria
siempre pendiendo de un hilo o de un alambre.
el aguantar toda esta lluvia
que no ha parado de caer desde entonces
y subir y bajar de tantos buses
con la ropa mojada en el cuerpo y la resaca
y verte subir y bajar de tantos buses
sabiendo que cada vez es la última.+
©2004-2009 ~astigmatic
:iconastigmatic:

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:iconkakar:
god

It would be so great to make
a book with all of your poems
I'd buy it

i swear i would

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No i'm not.
:iconastigmatic:
+don't think i don't think about it. a lot, lately. i want to learn book binding. i'll just wait
until the book is thick enough to bind.
you'll be the first to know.
well, maybe the third.+

--
"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"
:iconkakar:
That would be really great!
Home bound books are the best, truly.

thank you

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No i'm not.
:iconchoicreiw:
could i be the fourth? i dont enjoy that much reading from monitor.
i would put it next to my favourite polish wojaczek if you didnt mind.
:iconastigmatic:
+homebound always get there.
hellbound, maybe.+

--
"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"
:iconastigmatic:
+i wouldn't mind at all.
now all i have to do is get mr. * stigmatattoo off his daze and get him to work for me.+

--
"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"
:iconvoices:
graceful.... that word isnt used enough when describing poetry, infact i dont know many things which i can describe as graceful, but the word implies something so much more than beauty, it almost conjures up feelings of hallucination.

what am i banging on about, good question, your "poem" is greaceful, it glides in out of consicoues thought, without ever trying to, that strudture and flow doesnt even sound contrived which is great.

+fav.
:iconastigmatic:
+you caught it. it actually snaps out of it at the end. thanks for your words.+

--
"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"
:iconpsychodoughbee:
i'm just playing polite with my husband, for i have no better accuracy to comment your poetry than scissor does.

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