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+ two truths

i’m counting on you, the already gone
to fill in the blank spaces
with your black suits
and finish singing the ferocious lie
of the unbreachable distance.
how right we were
on those nights of irrefutable pessimism
one truth was spoken:
everything seems to be crumbling away.
or two truths:
you will grow where my sight can’t reach you.
now i think that point
was met and crossed and left behind

a carefully penciled line on the proverbial locked room

an X on the map, drawn along the creases
(with the tip of a finger we overwalk
the seas and cliffs, the inland valleys,
the small townships, the houses, the house).

a carefully penciled line on the floor of the proverbial locked room.

________________________________________ ______________


+dos verdades

cuento con ustedes, los que ya se fueron
para llenar los espacios en blanco
con sus trajes negros
y terminar de cantar la mentira
feroz de la distancia infranqueable.
cuanta razón teníamos
en esas noches de irrefutable pesimismo
una verdad fue dicha:
todo parece desmoronarse.
o dos verdades:
crecerás donde mi vista no te alcance.
ahora pienso que ese punto
fue ya visto y cruzado, y dejado atrás

una línea cuidadosamente trazada a lápiz en la proverbial habitación cerrada

una X en el mapa, dibujada sobre los dobleces
(con la punta de un dedo sobrenadamos
los mares y riscos, los valles centrales,
los pueblos pequeños, las casas, la casa)

una línea cuidadosamente trazada a lápiz sobre el suelo de la proverbial habitación cerrada.
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©2005-2009 ~astigmatic
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+2005.
how very selfish of me.+

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:iconmemoryfinder:
wow that is really good. i like how you structured the writing as well.

--
Harder than a drama
Softer than a porn


Wishing I was there... Wishing you were here...
:iconstigmatattoo:
+thank you.+

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+"come now, my child, if we were planning to harm you, do you think we'd be lurking here beside the path in the very darkest part of the forest?"+
k.p.
:iconthatguyonthestreet:
Well, well.
I keep reading this over and over again.

And I find something else every time.
But I can't figure out what I keep finding.
They (the thoughts) arrive in my mind, fleeting, and just as quickly flitter out.

Be content with knowing that this is a very beautiful (for lack of a better word) piece of poetry, and I like it quite a lot.

:salute:

--
I'm so goth, I have a fishnet umbrella.

Still will put pink wig in front of wang and take photo for sex.
:iconstigmatattoo:
+i'll be content with that, no problem.+

--
+"come now, my child, if we were planning to harm you, do you think we'd be lurking here beside the path in the very darkest part of the forest?"+
k.p.
:iconblackpolish:
It stings every time.

Every... time.
:iconhamrick:
The meaning here is lost to me, but if it isn't smoothly put and hard thought-out, I must be something I'm not.

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:iconastigmatic:
+it was plain self-indulgence.+

--
"Now shut up, you distasteful Adbekunkus"

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